"some of the things i write" comments and critics

DemonGod · 03-08-2008, 12:09 PM

well? if you have a comment, fire away

whiteday26 · 03-08-2008, 12:53 PM

I am not good with criticizing literature, so instead I give you spelling corrections. Some of the grammar (like 'he's annoying, he's an idiot, he's just just a torch didn't seem right, but since some poems ignore grammar. I assumed they were intentional.)

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Originally Posted by DemonGod

but, unthil then

but, until then

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Originally Posted by DemonGod

or at least tyr to run from it.

or at least try to run from it

DemonGod · 03-08-2008, 01:40 PM

i will correct those mistakes, i always read over them

Barzillal · 03-12-2008, 05:56 AM

=) they have a nice feel to it and the Shana one is quite unique and uv pointed out the obvious in a creative way =D good work demongod

DemonGod · 03-12-2008, 03:01 PM

thanks ^_^

Barzillal · 03-14-2008, 05:55 PM

so any new entries that we can enjoy reading?

DemonGod · 03-14-2008, 06:15 PM

still thinking of one, normally i come across a sentence that acts as the basis for the poem but i had no luck recently....

Barzillal · 03-14-2008, 06:31 PM

so is it safe that I assume you lack the information to write one down?
if so yes most renowned writers do need some time to get the "fire" alive

DemonGod · 03-14-2008, 06:35 PM

yeah, getting the right feeling and sentence can take a couple of hours or sometimes a day, getting the poem right after getting the sentence only takes 15 minutes or so.

Barzillal · 03-18-2008, 07:30 PM

iv read your latest entry its more about of battle this time I am making a wild guess here that u are inspired by some scene in SNS or a movie that u just watched?

03-08-2008, 12:09 PM	#1 (permalink)
DemonGod Koi's Bunny Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: In my dreams, together with her Age: 17 Posts: 3,721 Rep Power: 1162	"some of the things i write" comments and critics well? if you have a comment, fire away __________________ Thanks a bunch asura :D thanks sano ^^ What could be under this spoiler..? Spoiler omg! O: didn't expect that! My claimed characters ^^ Spoiler Some of the things I've written: http://www.animea.net/forums/f50/som...w-s-emo-17252/ Place comments for those things here: http://www.animea.net/forums/f51/som...critics-17253/ AnimeA's family tree (if something's wrong pm me) http://i265.photobucket.com/albums/i...m/stamboom.jpg It looks so much better now =D My personality tests (7 and probably still more to come o.o) Spoiler "You're black! Your deep and mysterious, the perfect mix!" "Blue You are calm and controlled. You are also very sweet and get along with others well. Sometimes others do not understand why you are so nice and think you have a hidden agenda. If you do...thats to bad, but if you don't you have nothing to worry about! =]" Which Final Fantasy Character Are You? twilight test: "You are Edward! You are extremely good-looking and loving with excellent taste in music. Apparently your hobbies include music, fastness, and Bella. ^.~" seems she was right about me >.> but i would replace the Bella hobby with Rachy ;) o.o vampire test: You're a vampire bat. Aww... who's the cutest-wutest vampire in the world? You are! Normal vampires tend to be cranky and mean, but you're a sweet, sensitive little thing. You don't want to live in a drafty old castle; you'd rather hang out somewhere tropical with all of your friends. When you get hungry, instead of biting big holes in someone's neck, you make two teeny holes in their finger and lap up the blood with your tongue. If you could just shake that unfortunate habit of feeding on people while they're sleeping, you'd probably be the most popular pet on the planet -- you're fuzzy, you fit in a handbag, and you fly! Other signatures by de-kun, tama-san and asura: Spoiler How to not open a door XD Spoiler My Deviant :3 http://demon-god.deviantart.com/ She's mine and mine only ^^ Spoiler My hot foxy ^^ My little minions :3 Spoiler please feed them and help them evolve ^^ Adopted from Valenth Visit the Official AnimeA IRC Channel ^^

03-08-2008, 01:40 PM	#3 (permalink)
DemonGod Koi's Bunny Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: In my dreams, together with her Age: 17 Posts: 3,721 Rep Power: 1162	i will correct those mistakes, i always read over them __________________ Thanks a bunch asura :D thanks sano ^^ What could be under this spoiler..? Spoiler omg! O: didn't expect that! My claimed characters ^^ Spoiler Some of the things I've written: http://www.animea.net/forums/f50/som...w-s-emo-17252/ Place comments for those things here: http://www.animea.net/forums/f51/som...critics-17253/ AnimeA's family tree (if something's wrong pm me) http://i265.photobucket.com/albums/i...m/stamboom.jpg It looks so much better now =D My personality tests (7 and probably still more to come o.o) Spoiler "You're black! Your deep and mysterious, the perfect mix!" "Blue You are calm and controlled. You are also very sweet and get along with others well. Sometimes others do not understand why you are so nice and think you have a hidden agenda. If you do...thats to bad, but if you don't you have nothing to worry about! =]" Which Final Fantasy Character Are You? twilight test: "You are Edward! You are extremely good-looking and loving with excellent taste in music. Apparently your hobbies include music, fastness, and Bella. ^.~" seems she was right about me >.> but i would replace the Bella hobby with Rachy ;) o.o vampire test: You're a vampire bat. Aww... who's the cutest-wutest vampire in the world? You are! Normal vampires tend to be cranky and mean, but you're a sweet, sensitive little thing. You don't want to live in a drafty old castle; you'd rather hang out somewhere tropical with all of your friends. When you get hungry, instead of biting big holes in someone's neck, you make two teeny holes in their finger and lap up the blood with your tongue. If you could just shake that unfortunate habit of feeding on people while they're sleeping, you'd probably be the most popular pet on the planet -- you're fuzzy, you fit in a handbag, and you fly! Other signatures by de-kun, tama-san and asura: Spoiler How to not open a door XD Spoiler My Deviant :3 http://demon-god.deviantart.com/ She's mine and mine only ^^ Spoiler My hot foxy ^^ My little minions :3 Spoiler please feed them and help them evolve ^^ Adopted from Valenth Visit the Official AnimeA IRC Channel ^^

03-12-2008, 05:56 AM	#4 (permalink)
Barzillal Vanguard Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Under the stairs Posts: 7,540 Rep Power: 223	=) they have a nice feel to it and the Shana one is quite unique and uv pointed out the obvious in a creative way =D good work demongod __________________ sig made by our very own de-kun I will be in and out... I have something to do ahahaha D: Christ I hate...this Fanclubs Spoiler Family Tree Spoiler

03-12-2008, 03:01 PM	#5 (permalink)
DemonGod Koi's Bunny Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: In my dreams, together with her Age: 17 Posts: 3,721 Rep Power: 1162	thanks ^_^ __________________ Thanks a bunch asura :D thanks sano ^^ What could be under this spoiler..? Spoiler omg! O: didn't expect that! My claimed characters ^^ Spoiler Some of the things I've written: http://www.animea.net/forums/f50/som...w-s-emo-17252/ Place comments for those things here: http://www.animea.net/forums/f51/som...critics-17253/ AnimeA's family tree (if something's wrong pm me) http://i265.photobucket.com/albums/i...m/stamboom.jpg It looks so much better now =D My personality tests (7 and probably still more to come o.o) Spoiler "You're black! Your deep and mysterious, the perfect mix!" "Blue You are calm and controlled. You are also very sweet and get along with others well. Sometimes others do not understand why you are so nice and think you have a hidden agenda. If you do...thats to bad, but if you don't you have nothing to worry about! =]" Which Final Fantasy Character Are You? twilight test: "You are Edward! You are extremely good-looking and loving with excellent taste in music. Apparently your hobbies include music, fastness, and Bella. ^.~" seems she was right about me >.> but i would replace the Bella hobby with Rachy ;) o.o vampire test: You're a vampire bat. Aww... who's the cutest-wutest vampire in the world? You are! Normal vampires tend to be cranky and mean, but you're a sweet, sensitive little thing. You don't want to live in a drafty old castle; you'd rather hang out somewhere tropical with all of your friends. When you get hungry, instead of biting big holes in someone's neck, you make two teeny holes in their finger and lap up the blood with your tongue. If you could just shake that unfortunate habit of feeding on people while they're sleeping, you'd probably be the most popular pet on the planet -- you're fuzzy, you fit in a handbag, and you fly! Other signatures by de-kun, tama-san and asura: Spoiler How to not open a door XD Spoiler My Deviant :3 http://demon-god.deviantart.com/ She's mine and mine only ^^ Spoiler My hot foxy ^^ My little minions :3 Spoiler please feed them and help them evolve ^^ Adopted from Valenth Visit the Official AnimeA IRC Channel ^^

03-14-2008, 05:55 PM	#6 (permalink)
Barzillal Vanguard Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Under the stairs Posts: 7,540 Rep Power: 223	so any new entries that we can enjoy reading? __________________ sig made by our very own de-kun I will be in and out... I have something to do ahahaha D: Christ I hate...this Fanclubs Spoiler Family Tree Spoiler

03-14-2008, 06:15 PM	#7 (permalink)
DemonGod Koi's Bunny Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: In my dreams, together with her Age: 17 Posts: 3,721 Rep Power: 1162	still thinking of one, normally i come across a sentence that acts as the basis for the poem but i had no luck recently.... __________________ Thanks a bunch asura :D thanks sano ^^ What could be under this spoiler..? Spoiler omg! O: didn't expect that! My claimed characters ^^ Spoiler Some of the things I've written: http://www.animea.net/forums/f50/som...w-s-emo-17252/ Place comments for those things here: http://www.animea.net/forums/f51/som...critics-17253/ AnimeA's family tree (if something's wrong pm me) http://i265.photobucket.com/albums/i...m/stamboom.jpg It looks so much better now =D My personality tests (7 and probably still more to come o.o) Spoiler "You're black! Your deep and mysterious, the perfect mix!" "Blue You are calm and controlled. You are also very sweet and get along with others well. Sometimes others do not understand why you are so nice and think you have a hidden agenda. If you do...thats to bad, but if you don't you have nothing to worry about! =]" Which Final Fantasy Character Are You? twilight test: "You are Edward! You are extremely good-looking and loving with excellent taste in music. Apparently your hobbies include music, fastness, and Bella. ^.~" seems she was right about me >.> but i would replace the Bella hobby with Rachy ;) o.o vampire test: You're a vampire bat. Aww... who's the cutest-wutest vampire in the world? You are! Normal vampires tend to be cranky and mean, but you're a sweet, sensitive little thing. You don't want to live in a drafty old castle; you'd rather hang out somewhere tropical with all of your friends. When you get hungry, instead of biting big holes in someone's neck, you make two teeny holes in their finger and lap up the blood with your tongue. If you could just shake that unfortunate habit of feeding on people while they're sleeping, you'd probably be the most popular pet on the planet -- you're fuzzy, you fit in a handbag, and you fly! Other signatures by de-kun, tama-san and asura: Spoiler How to not open a door XD Spoiler My Deviant :3 http://demon-god.deviantart.com/ She's mine and mine only ^^ Spoiler My hot foxy ^^ My little minions :3 Spoiler please feed them and help them evolve ^^ Adopted from Valenth Visit the Official AnimeA IRC Channel ^^

03-14-2008, 06:31 PM	#8 (permalink)
Barzillal Vanguard Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Under the stairs Posts: 7,540 Rep Power: 223	so is it safe that I assume you lack the information to write one down? if so yes most renowned writers do need some time to get the "fire" alive __________________ sig made by our very own de-kun I will be in and out... I have something to do ahahaha D: Christ I hate...this Fanclubs Spoiler Family Tree Spoiler

03-14-2008, 06:35 PM	#9 (permalink)
DemonGod Koi's Bunny Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: In my dreams, together with her Age: 17 Posts: 3,721 Rep Power: 1162	yeah, getting the right feeling and sentence can take a couple of hours or sometimes a day, getting the poem right after getting the sentence only takes 15 minutes or so. __________________ Thanks a bunch asura :D thanks sano ^^ What could be under this spoiler..? Spoiler omg! O: didn't expect that! My claimed characters ^^ Spoiler Some of the things I've written: http://www.animea.net/forums/f50/som...w-s-emo-17252/ Place comments for those things here: http://www.animea.net/forums/f51/som...critics-17253/ AnimeA's family tree (if something's wrong pm me) http://i265.photobucket.com/albums/i...m/stamboom.jpg It looks so much better now =D My personality tests (7 and probably still more to come o.o) Spoiler "You're black! Your deep and mysterious, the perfect mix!" "Blue You are calm and controlled. You are also very sweet and get along with others well. Sometimes others do not understand why you are so nice and think you have a hidden agenda. If you do...thats to bad, but if you don't you have nothing to worry about! =]" Which Final Fantasy Character Are You? twilight test: "You are Edward! You are extremely good-looking and loving with excellent taste in music. Apparently your hobbies include music, fastness, and Bella. ^.~" seems she was right about me >.> but i would replace the Bella hobby with Rachy ;) o.o vampire test: You're a vampire bat. Aww... who's the cutest-wutest vampire in the world? You are! Normal vampires tend to be cranky and mean, but you're a sweet, sensitive little thing. You don't want to live in a drafty old castle; you'd rather hang out somewhere tropical with all of your friends. When you get hungry, instead of biting big holes in someone's neck, you make two teeny holes in their finger and lap up the blood with your tongue. If you could just shake that unfortunate habit of feeding on people while they're sleeping, you'd probably be the most popular pet on the planet -- you're fuzzy, you fit in a handbag, and you fly! Other signatures by de-kun, tama-san and asura: Spoiler How to not open a door XD Spoiler My Deviant :3 http://demon-god.deviantart.com/ She's mine and mine only ^^ Spoiler My hot foxy ^^ My little minions :3 Spoiler please feed them and help them evolve ^^ Adopted from Valenth Visit the Official AnimeA IRC Channel ^^

03-18-2008, 07:30 PM	#10 (permalink)
Barzillal Vanguard Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Under the stairs Posts: 7,540 Rep Power: 223	iv read your latest entry its more about of battle this time I am making a wild guess here that u are inspired by some scene in SNS or a movie that u just watched? __________________ sig made by our very own de-kun I will be in and out... I have something to do ahahaha D: Christ I hate...this Fanclubs Spoiler Family Tree Spoiler

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