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Old 03-08-2008, 11:09 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Old 03-08-2008, 11:53 AM   #2 (permalink)
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I am not good with criticizing literature, so instead I give you spelling corrections. Some of the grammar (like 'he's annoying, he's an idiot, he's just just a torch didn't seem right, but since some poems ignore grammar. I assumed they were intentional.)

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but, unthil then
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or at least tyr to run from it.
or at least try to run from it
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Old 03-08-2008, 12:40 PM   #3 (permalink)
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i will correct those mistakes, i always read over them
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=) they have a nice feel to it and the Shana one is quite unique and uv pointed out the obvious in a creative way =D good work demongod
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Old 03-12-2008, 02:01 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Old 03-14-2008, 04:55 PM   #6 (permalink)
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so any new entries that we can enjoy reading?
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Old 03-14-2008, 05:15 PM   #7 (permalink)
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still thinking of one, normally i come across a sentence that acts as the basis for the poem but i had no luck recently....
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so is it safe that I assume you lack the information to write one down?
if so yes most renowned writers do need some time to get the "fire" alive
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Old 03-14-2008, 05:35 PM   #9 (permalink)
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