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Old 03-18-2008, 07:33 PM   #11 (permalink)
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Old 04-02-2008, 04:18 AM   #12 (permalink)
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I just read the first 6, nice work! Normally I hate non-rhyming poems, but I really like your stuff!

The only one I didn't like was the first because I didn't fully agree with it, but that's a whole nother conversation in itself.

I loved Attacked?, Love, and Suffering.

Attacked? was cool because it took a unique twist on a topic that tons of poems have been written on.

I like Love so much because it's the sad story of so many teens-and even adults-today. I do have to say that I didn't fully understand the end part of 'never to be heard of again.'

I liked pain because it makes a dark point that holds a lot of truth. I didn't fully agree with the 'nothing can cure it, nothing can reach it' part, but once again that's a whole nother conversation in itself.

Gosh sorry this is so long but I very rarely actually enjoy poems I read by other users on forums ^^;

I guess I like yours so much because they felt real and honest, they make a connection with a lot of us teens, and they're very clear and easy to understand-so many people seem to over use flowerdy words and phrases to make their stuff sound good or dreamy and just end up with a pile of meaningless, disconnected lines that may or may not have a sense of beauty.

Nice work, cousin! *huggles*

oh btw do you mind if I save some to my com?
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Old 04-03-2008, 07:46 PM   #13 (permalink)
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that is officially the best comment i've ever had.

i don't want to start a debate over the first poem either.

the end of love is just what it says, she would never hear of me again.

and for pain, as far as i know a cure for the death and suffering in the world is yet to be found, but if you have another vision on that part i don't mind it, i think poems are meant to be that way.

I don't mind if you save some to your computer, i would be honoured if you would do that
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Old 04-04-2008, 01:05 AM   #14 (permalink)
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wow teeny o.O thats a nice interpretation of Demon's poem
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Old 04-04-2008, 03:58 AM   #15 (permalink)
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hey you spelt honored funny are you British or something? Sorry guys I guess that has nothing to do with poetry ^^;
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Old 04-04-2008, 10:10 PM   #16 (permalink)
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how do you mean funny, this is how you spell it according to my dictionary
and no i'm not british, i'm dutch
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Old 04-05-2008, 04:51 AM   #17 (permalink)
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mmmm yet another person to make me feel boring for being American XD
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Old 04-06-2008, 01:32 PM   #18 (permalink)
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want to switch countries, i hate mine, it's totally anime dead...

and do you have a suggestion for a next poem, i'm kinda idea-less now
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