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You can get payed to cosplay?! maybe you could do something about friends and your perception of friendship...but I need to read some more of your stuff tonight so I can see what you already have covered.
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yes you can get payed to cosplay, they have those costume cafe's friendship, uuhm, i think i could try that, maybe i could add something with betrayal, or i could try to make a happy poem, for the difference.
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sure sounds good! Tell me when you get it/them up.
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done, what do you think?
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Good job! You did it with the same honesty and clarity that I like so much...and now my name is in dg's poem thread! Woohoo! So "trapped" has me curious...does the light represent anything specific?
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that one was written, well kinda as an experiment. i just tried stuff that sounded good and it doesn't have any personal meaning to me like the other poems.
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I read about half of your poems so far. I like your style. They seem to have nice flow and they don't get too wordy. I also like the length you use in most cases. I prefer shorter poems to longer ones, they seem to send the message a little better.
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the simplicity of the words relayed quite a huge impact on me as I was reading your last poem. It suggest ones helplessness to some circumstances... and it does happen u know...
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is that a positive or a negative comment? that sounds like some kind of accusation.
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it is a positive one, cause most poems are too flashy and to the point of being redundant... your work expresses the sincerity and rawness of ones feeling when writing at the time of question I'm chained, stuck, unable to move I can only watch as she suffers I can only see how she struggles I'm feeling powerless I'm feeling useless these lines struck me the most
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