Shojo Manga Alliance 2.0

[Muse]

I'm glad you have time! *hugs*
I'm already done reading, turns out it's only 4 chapters. ^_^

Now waiting for all to finish :)

[SchwarZ22]

i'll start reading tomorrow..need to sleep now...goodnight.. :)

[RebbieChan]

Yes! This looks fun! I've been trying to get us to read horror for a while! ;P

Good thing is really short too, that way we all can read it^^

[wolfiechan]

imma try reading..
if only I could stay here..

how I wish our thesis would just be over already!!!

[SchwarZ22]

sorry guys i drop the reading on chapter 2... :(

the story is kinda fast. I dunno for some reason its kinda off..sorry..really .... though the drawing is rated 10/10 but its not enough to keep me hooked up on the reading.. :)

[Muse]

I don't blame you Schwarz! The story sucked! D:
And it was sandwiched between other stories which I totally wasn't expecting. And Schwarz you are right, it was so fast that it had big gaps in the plot. I mean there's so much going on that we don't know. I'd have liked to know the characters better and stuff, there's a rivalry and then it's resolved so soon >.>

It was just a complete waste of time D:
The idea was different and had lots of potential if they'd only tried to make it into a nice, coherent story. I'll write more when the others join o.o

[Arinya]

i finished reading canary child... and i agree with schwarz. the story was too fast... and not only that, it felt kinda unconnected... i can't really feel with the characters. i didn't know where the author wants to go.. where the romance is... okay that one guy took the main girl in and was the only one who wanted her so she felt grateful... yeah okay... but then? nothing really happens... i mean okay she gets attacked a lot because she is the perfect doll.. which is another thing i couldn't understand. she has the arm of a doll... for me that's not a doll at all. it's just an artificial arm - nothing more.
and the feelings of that guy weren't shown at all. he was just jealous of her father. the feelings towards her are not there. he protects her.. that's it. he only joked around with the dolls he made and there was a comment that he made other dolls before. yay.. story left in the open... why did he change? his story was completely missing...
i think the story could have been actually interesting if the mangaka carefully included those missing points and not put in so much trouble... or if she had more chapters to work with... i usually hate it when the story doesn't progress but i want it to progress in a way that one can comprehend. this story was completely missing on so many points that i don't think that i can even say what bugs me the most

[Muse]

Yeah, I honestly don't know what the author wanted the readers to see or believe. The first initial pages I was like okay, this might not be so bad and there's some humorous element in there too but then as i kept reading on I was like what is this? So she and her father's apprentice live together and they've vowed to find the killer who murdered the doll maker but for some reason they never really do it either. The murderer himself comes forward and kidnaps the girls only to get back at the apprentice.

This could've been so much better, I generally think the idea of a doll maker, breathing life into his creepily pretty dolls is kind of nice and could've been real dark. I kind of kept waiting for the horror bit but was totally disappointed.

A little more insight into the characters would have been great. I think it would have been great had the mangaka started the story from before the murder happens, just a little bit perhaps. The doll maker's life was a mystery through out.

[Arinya]

i didn't mind the story of the doll maker not being shown in the beginning. in between you get a lot of hints... though it was quite disappointing for me that i don't know what really happened when he died... the other guy killed him... yes. and something with the artificial arm being his last masterpiece.... but showing the scene of it would have definitely helped a bit...
i don't know what the mangaka understands under horror or similar things but having a headless person in the beginning and another one (+ the cut off finger) towards the end is nowhere near scary... therefore the other things which make a horror story were missing completely. the bad guy was a bit creepy... but if he really had been that evil, he wouldn't have let them go.... i still ask myself why he did that... if he was really warped... he wouldn't have done that when it just got funny for him... i mean he was the one who wanted to make her cry... so he should simply have done that.. and shortly after he comes back sending their doll back + another one who gets them back to him? that doesn't make sense!

[Muse]

You're right, it just didn't make sense, specially the way the villain/murderer acted. To be very honest, by the end of it I kind of lost interest and just wanted to finish it so I could discuss it here with you guys. Initially, when we're told about the pain in the girl's arm and how she's unable to control it at times, I thought to myself oh, now this is interesting. There's going to be some complex story about it that I'll definitely enjoy. Turns out I was wrong.


Horror was totally off, it wasn't even creepy or disturbing. I think they should have had at least 10 chapters and made a good thorough story. And I would've definitely liked some more romance, or at least a little bit of build up. I don't care how long they've been living together and how well they understand each other, I want to see some chemistry, some spark >.>


Did you read the other stories in between? I did not, it kind of ruined my reading momentum to be honest >.>