Hello everyone!!
In this thread I want to share a story with you.
It's been spooking in my head for months now and I used to daydream a lot about it
Now I'm finally writing it down
For y'all exclusively
Feel free to comment, crit and post some predictions what's going to happen here
So in short: what's this story about?
It's about a vampire and a fairy... I think you could call it a romantic adventure
When young Mateo decided to die someone made him into a vampire and now he does what vampires do, living at nighttime only and feeding on human blood. He got used to his cursed existence and even has made a few friends.
When Loreena the fairy enters his territory he decides to kill her because her appearence is irritating him... will he manage to kill the fairy? And why is he always feeling so strange when she's around him?
If you want to know more... you gotta read it
Who is who?
Basic characters:
Hatisake Mateo (the vamp)
Burina Loreena (the fairy)
Kazuka Rupo (a werewolf and the best friend of Mateo)
Otero Fatufa (a witch and the girlfriend of Rupo-kun, she's also a good friend of Mateo and seems to know something about fairies)
So... now let's finally start with the story!
Chapter 1
'No! This can't be! This can't be happening!', Mateo thinks while looking at the terrifying image before his eyes, 'Not in the wedding night! We're on honeymoon goddamnit!'
"Mateo... i...it's not how... it ... it looks like...", Yurina, his wife, starts to stutter while standing up from the bed, covering herself.
"Yurina, stop stuttering and don't say such stupid things, it's exactly what it looks like", Usagai - Mateos best friend! - says calmly.
"I used to love you", Mateo says suddenly totally calm, "You both"
He turns around and walks out of the bedroom.
"Ma... Mateo!", Yurina screams and tries to run after him, but Usagai stops her shaking his head saying: "I don't think he wants to see you right now."
"I like him, he's so kind... I wouldn't really mind falling in love with him... since our fathers decided the wedding. But I can't fall in love with him, because ever since I can think, I used to love you Usagai-kun."
"I don't really think running after him, telling him that and pittying him would do anything good. He just needs to calm down his head."
"But he looked so hurt."
Usagai sighs and gets dressed: "Fine I'll go look after him, I won't get near to him though. He propably wants to hit me right now."
Yurina smiles and kisses Usagai light on the lips.
Mateo heard everything, because he is leaning against the wall right next to the door to the bedroom, he really wanted to run away from this place and don't see anyone, but when he got outside the bedroom he suddenly felt so weak, tears were dropping down from his face and wetted his shirt, his legs got weak and wobbly and he couldn't walk.
But now that he hears that Usagai wants to go after him, he stumbles out of the building and runs to the woods, where the lake is where the three of them used to play when they were kids.
This lake holds so much memories, good ones - like the fun they had playing in the water.
And bad ones - like the time when Yurina was five and fell into the lake, she couldn't swim and Mateo jumped after her. He completely forgot that he couldn't swim either and so Usagai had to save them both from drowning.
Now Mateo stands before the lake, the crescent moon is reflecting in the water and Mateo tightens the rope against his waist. He's totally calm and lookes at the stone at the other end of the rope, once again.
He lost everything what was precious in his life - his wife - his best friend - his mother just died the other day and what's left is only his shame of having a wife that would sleep with another man than her husband in the wedding night and his father is left too, his father who just keeps telling his son that he's just a nuisance as a family heir.
With this thoughts, Mateo throws the heavy stone with great effort into the lake and is pulled down by it into the lake, where only the sweet death awaits.
'I'm dying', he thinks sinking deeper into the lake as his heart beats slower and slower and his lungs fill with water.
When someone jumps after him his consciousness starts to fade. Suddenly a girl is appearing before him as the other person is coming nearer, dives deeper into the lake.
'Is this the end? Are you the angel that will take me to heaven? Or are you the devil that will take me to hell?', he thinks when the girl smiles at him. He wants to see how she looks like, but all he can see is her mouth smiling, otherwise she's practically faceless.
"You know I really don't like water", she says, still smiling, "But I can't let a cute boy like you vanish from this world like this. You will be my creature."
'Her creature? This must be death, I'm hallucinating.'
"Now die Mateo", the girl says - still smiling.
*gasp* Mateo awakes shaking and sweating cold sweat.
"Geez... that dream again", he says into the dark cold room, "Why do I remember my death so clearly? It has been already almost 150 years! Good thing that the sun already set."
Mateo sighs and stands up from the bed, in passing he grabs one of his black T-Shirts.
It was 1864 when he died, the one who jumed after him was Usagai, he saw the bubbles at the surface of the lake and tried to rescue Mateo, but it was already too late. Mateos breathing had already stopped and at that time no one knew about first aid and Mouth-to-mouth resuscitation.
He had this dream over and over again every day of his undead existence, but when he tries to remember the looks of that girl that was in the water with him, he only remembers her cold, but at the same time kind, smile and her dark red hair that looked like blood floating in the water.
After getting dressed Mateo grabs a bloodbag from the fridge and pours it into a glass, after that he puts in into the microwave.
'What a great invention', he thinks while the glass is slowly turning around in the microwave, 'With this I can heat the blood up and don't have to feed on human directly... I don't like killing so the bloodbanks are really a great thing.'
When he takes the glass out of the microwave and leans against the sideboard to sip his "breakfast" he hears a slight noise.
"Who's there?", he asks into his appartement.
'There shouldn't be someone here. How did they come in?', he thinks while checking what it is with his super-vampire-hearing.
It's just one person, normal human heartbeat.
"Well hy there", some girl suddenly says appearing right in front of him.
Mateo looks at her and drops the glass.
'That smile... that bloody red hair... it's her!'
to be continued =)
Author's note
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