Crits and Comments on "The Denying"

[Miu-chan]

this is the thread to crit and comment my story "The Denying"

enjoy and please don't be too mean...

here's the link to the story

[Miu-chan]

a new chapter of the story just got on...
read it here

[Miu-chan]

again... I wrote a new chapter...
read it here

[Ukizilla]

Hey!
Thanks for the link. The story is cool. I love such stuff. Vamires, fairys etc.
I like your writing style and the charas as far.
I will definitely continue reading.
So please continue writing.

[Miu-chan]

thank youuu!! *hugs*

btw... another chapter just got on =)

[Miu-chan]

nother chapter just got on ^^
read it here

[Ryoga]

Okay well first things first, i'll point out to you some of the typos, then i'll tell you what I thought about it.^^
I'll just give you the chapter numbers, the words you misspelled, and the right spelling next to it.:)

Chapter 1:

befor = before
turnes = turns
existance= existence

Chapter 2:

easy = easily
yelles = yells
favourite = favorite
appartement = apartment
leavs = leaves
whiped = wiped
unnknown = unknown

Chapter 3:

yelles = yells
dissappears = disappears
leafs = leaves
beggs = begs the 3rd paragraph in
punnishment = punishment

Chapter 4:

blury = blurry
chuckels = chuckles 2nd paragraph in

Chapter 6:

amoung = among the first paragraph in
convice= convince
consequenses = consequences

Chapter 8:

favourite = favorite
allmighty = almighty
curelty = cruelty
cuckles = chuckles it's the 4th paragraph in

I hope I wasn't too mean about that, I was trying to be as nice as I could be^^, and those were the only chapters with typos that I could see. As for the story, I loved it, I especially liked how you had a link in there to show what the pattern on the coin was, so that your readers could see it, instead of trying to imagine it. Plus it's very imaginative, taking in different stories of mythical creatures and legends, like how you also used people from the story of King Aurthur.:) All together so far so good, it's very well put together and it almost makes me think that it just might be real.:D So I can't wait until the next chapter comes out.:D

[Miu-chan]

well first, thanks for showing me my spelling mistakes ^^
I really hate it when I make them xD
oh btw.... favourite's the british way to spell favorite... I learned that in school =)

and second
thanks for the positive comment =)

so... what do you think will happen next ;)
you wanna guess where her real source of power is suited?

[Ryoga]

You're welcome^^

And i'm not really sure, I doubt that she would have her real power anywhere on her, because that would make her too vulnerable to attack.
So if I had to guess, I would say that most likely her true power might be contained in an object either in the fairy world, or it just might be on Earth. It's likely on Earth, because even though she doesn't have it on her, for her to use it, it might have to be near her at least.:)

[Miu-chan]

^^
You'll see